Everyone is alone on the heart of the Earth
pierced by a beam of sun
and it's immediatly evening.
(Ungaretti)
Please correct me, if necessary.
Many thanks
I don't know the original and it is a poem so that is hard to correct.
THe first part sounds fine but the last line sounds a little strange.
Maybe you can say "and suddenly it's evening".
But you know in poetry anything can be correct.