Javi R.
Here I am I'm an a young electronic engineer who is looking for improve his English skills. I like to play role playing games like The Call of Cthulhu or D&D, also I like to read comics (DC and Marvel) and novels. I like to cook and I am learning to make cocktail drinks. Also I play the guitar since I was 13 and I like play rock music and acoustic music. I go to the gym everyday and I do some workout because I like to practise sport. Furthermore I'm a passionate of modern technology and I am very interested on it. I don't know how much you want to know about me haha so I think this is the end. Nice to meet you people!!
Sep 17, 2014 9:20 PM
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Here I am

I'm an a young electronic engineer who is looking for to improve his English skills. I like to play role playing games like The Call of Cthulhu or D&D, also I like to read comics (DC and Marvel) and novels. I like to cook and I am learning to make cocktail drinks. Also I have played the guitar since I was 13 and I like to play rock music and acoustic music. I go to the gym everyday and I do some workout because I like to practise sports. Furthermore, I'm a passionate of about modern technology and I am very interested on in it. I don't know how much you want to know about me haha so I think this is the end.

Nice to meet you people!!

 

[This was very well written!]

September 17, 2014

Here I am

I'm an a young electronic engineer who is looking to (1) improve his English skills. I like to play role playing games like The Call of Cthulhu or D&D, also I like to read comics (DC and Marvel) and novels. I like to cook and I am learning to make cocktail drinks. Also I play I have played (2) the guitar since I was 13 and I like playing (3) rock music and acoustic music. I go to the gym everyday and I do  some workout a workout OR some exercise (4) because I like to  practise  do sport (5). Furthermore I'm a passionate fan (6) of modern technology and I am very interested on in (7) it. I don't know how much you want to know about me haha so I think this is the end. 

Nice to meet you people!!

 

This is really very good.  I am an Engish teacher so I have corrected everything and given you the reasons below.  Be happy because it IS good.  I am just explaining the grammar behind your small errors.

 

CORRECTION NOTES

(1) I am looking/hoping + infinitive (hoping is more commonly used) Example:  I'm hoping to improve my English.

(2)  With for and since use the present perfect tense Present perfect is used for a past event that is connected with now ( you started playing in the past and are still playing now so you must use this tense.  Example:  I have played since I was 13 ( since + start time) OR I have played for 14 years (for + time in years/moths/ days....)

(3) Like + full infinitive for specific preferences (example: I like to sing, but not to dance) OR like + gerund for general facts about you (Example: I like singing it has always been my hobby), NOTE often they mean exacty the same thing.

(4)  Workout is the collective name for all the exercises, so you are doing only one workout and lots of exercises. (a workout and some exercises). NOTE: 'to work out' can also be a phrasal verb -  so you can also say I work out!

(5) To take part in sport OR do sport (the word practise, means that you repeat the skill every day in order to get better at it., so you can say I practise running every day and by next year I will be much faster.

(6)  passionate is NOT a noun ( it's an adjective) after the word 'a' you need a noun. Example: I am a fan of technology (or a lover of technology), because the words 'lover' and 'fan' are nouns.  You can also say I am passionate about....something (remove the 'a', because passionate is not a noun).

 (7)  To be interested in something.  Example:  I'm interested in learning English.

 

September 17, 2014

Here I am

I'm an a young electronic engineer who is looking for toimprove his English skills. I like to play role playing games like The Call of Cthulhu or D&D, also I like to read comics (DC and Marvel) and novels. I like to cook and I am learning to make cocktail drinks. Also I have played the guitar since I was 13 and I like to play rock music and acoustic music. I go to the gym everyday and I do some workout because I like to practise sports. Furthermore I'm a passionate of about modern technology and I am very interested on in it. I don't know how much you want to know about me haha so I think this is the end.

Nice to meet you people!!

 

[My corrections are very minor.  Your written English is quite good!]

September 17, 2014

Here I am

I'm an a young electronic engineer who is looking for improve his English skills. I like to play role playing games like The Call of Cthulhu or D&D, also I like to read comics (DC and Marvel) and novels. I like to cook and I am learning to make cocktail drinks. Also I play the guitar since I was 13 and I like play rock music and acoustic music. I go to the gym everyday and I workout because I like to practise sport. Furthermore I'm a passionate of modern technology and I am very interested on it. I don't know how much you want to know about me haha so I think this is the end.

Nice to meet you people!!

September 17, 2014
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