Tuan
"Treaty No.7" - The TV show that I like the most In recent times, there are many interesting programs on TV channels but a program has brought the most impressive for me that is "Treaty No.7" It was broadcast at 1 pm, Saturday for weekly on VTV3 channel. This was the reality television program to perform the characters' dreams, who have special circumstances to become a reality. I still remember the first time I watched the program, there is a guy with Wilson disease - It is body-shrinking disease. But by virtue of himself, he was not only overcame his fate also he had a warm heart. He sat on a wheelchair begging money to help the children disabilities. The "Treaty No.7" gave surprising gifts for him and he was very moved. As soon as I watched it I was very move and crying. I told myself that I would help people with special circumstances if I get a chance.
Sep 21, 2014 2:24 PM
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"Treaty No.7" - The TV show that I like the most

In recent times, There are many interesting programs on TV channels but the program that has impressed me the most is "Treaty No.7"
It was broadcasted at 1 pm, Saturday, for weekly on VTV3 channel. This was a reality television program to perform characters' dreams, who have special circumstances, to become a reality.
I still remember the first time I watched the program, there is a guy with Wilson disease- it is body-shrinking disease. But by virtue of himself, he was not only overcame his fate also he but he also had a warm heart. He sat on a wheelchair begging for money to help the children with disabilities. The "Treaty No.7" gave surprising gifts for him and he was very moved.
As soon as I watched it I was very moved and cried. I told myself that I would help people with special circumstances if I get a chance.

 

This is a great entry!!! Your mistakes were minor but I have corrected what I saw. I'm really impressed by your proper use of the apostrophe after the plural form of "character" because most native English speakers do not use nor understand this rule. Looking foreward to more posts from you, Tuan! Chúc một ngày tốt!

September 21, 2014
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