Shawn
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Menonton film The Maze Runner dengan Josh Pada malam minggu saya pergi ke Cinemark dengan Josh dan kami menonton film The Maze Runner. Saya sangat suka film ini. Faktanya The Maze Runner menurut saya bagus sekali. Pada akhir minggu ini saya mau menonton film Dolphin Tale 2 dengan keponakanku Ashlyn,. Pada malam minggu saya juga pergi ke pameran kota Belchertown dengan Josh. Kami bertemu teman-teman dia di sana. Saya membeli dua "Italian sausages", dua "soft serve ice creams in waffle cones", dan "pumpkin beer". Saya juga membeli kalung kecubung. Setelah pameran itu, saya dan Josh santai di bak mandi air panas dia. Setelah bekerja hari ini saya tidak membeli es teh hijau di Starbucks tapi besok pagi saya akan pergi ke Cumberland Farms yang terletak di Hadley, Massachusetts untuk membeli es teh dan setelah bekerja besok saya akan membeli es teh hijau di Starbucks. Saya mungkin juga membeli seiris pumpkin cheesecake. == American English for English Learners == Seeing the movie "The Maze Runner" with Josh: Saturday night, I went to Cinemark with Josh and we saw the film "The Maze Runner." I really liked this film. In fact, in my opinion, "The Maze Runner" is a great movie. This weekend, I want to see the movie "Dolphin Tale 2" with my niece Ashlyn. I also went to the Belchertown fair with Josh on Saturday night. We met his friends there. I bought two Italian sausages, 2 soft serve ice creams in waffle cones, and a pumpkin beer. I also bought an amethyst necklace. After the fair, Josh and I relaxed in his hot tub. After work today, I didn't buy an iced green tea at Starbucks but tomorrow morning, I'm going to Cumberland Farms in Hadley to buy an iced tea and after work tomorrow, I am going to buy an iced green tea at Starbucks. I might buy a slice of pumpkin cheesecake too.
Sep 23, 2014 12:37 AM
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Menonton film The Maze Runner dengan Josh

Pada malam minggu saya pergi ke Cinemark dengan Josh dan kami menonton film The Maze Runner. Saya sangat suka film ini. Faktanya, The Maze Runner menurut saya bagus sekali. Pada akhir minggu ini, saya mau menonton film Dolphin Tale 2 dengan keponakanku Ashlyn,.

Pada malam minggu Saya juga pergi ke pameran kota Belchertown dengan Josh pada malam minggu itu. Kami bertemu teman-teman dia di sana. Saya membeli dua "Italian sausages", dua "soft serve ice creams in waffle cones", dan "pumpkin beer". Saya juga membeli kalung kecubung. Setelah pameran itu, saya dan Josh bersantai di bak mandi air panas dia.

Setelah bekerja hari ini, saya tidak membeli es teh hijau di Starbucks tapi besok pagi, saya akan pergi ke Cumberland Farms yang terletak di Hadley, Massachusetts untuk membeli es teh dan setelah selesai bekerja besok, saya akan membeli es teh hijau di Starbucks. Saya mungkin juga membeli seiris pumpkin cheesecake.

 

Almost perfect Shawn, I fixed your text based in english version :)

== American English for English Learners ==

Seeing the movie "The Maze Runner" with Josh:

Saturday night, I went to Cinemark with Josh and we saw the film "The Maze Runner." I really liked this film. In fact, in my opinion, "The Maze Runner" is a great movie. This weekend, I want to see the movie "Dolphin Tale 2" with my niece Ashlyn.

I also went to the Belchertown fair with Josh on Saturday night. We met his friends there. I bought two Italian sausages, 2 soft serve ice creams in waffle cones, and a pumpkin beer. I also bought an amethyst necklace. After the fair, Josh and I relaxed in his hot tub.

After work today, I didn't buy an iced green tea at Starbucks but tomorrow morning, I'm going to Cumberland Farms in Hadley to buy an iced tea and after work tomorrow, I am going to buy an iced green tea at Starbucks. I might buy a slice of pumpkin cheesecake too.

September 23, 2014

Menonton film The Maze Runner dengan Josh

Pada malam minggu saya pergi ke Cinemark dengan Josh dan kami menonton film The Maze Runner. Saya sangat suka film ini. Faktanya The Maze Runner menurut saya bagus sekali. Pada akhir minggu ini saya mau menonton film Dolphin Tale 2 dengan keponakanku Ashlyn,.

 

Kalimat "Faktanya" di konteks ini terdengar tidak natural di telinga orang Indonesia, jadi lebih bagus tidak usah di pakai.

Pada malam minggu saya juga pergi ke pameran kota Belchertown dengan Josh. Kami bertemu teman-teman dia di sana. Saya membeli dua "Italian sausages", dua "soft serve ice creams in waffle cones", dan "pumpkin beer". Saya juga membeli kalung kecubung. Setelah pameran itu, saya dan Josh santai di bak mandi air panas dia.

Setelah bekerja hari ini saya tidak membeli es teh hijau di Starbucks tapi besok pagi saya akan pergi ke Cumberland Farms yang terletak di Hadley, Massachusetts untuk membeli es teh dan setelah bekerja besok saya akan membeli es teh hijau di Starbucks. Saya mungkin juga membeli seiris pumpkin cheesecake.

 

Kalimat di atas sebenarnya tidak salah, namun agak tidak terdengar natural di telinga orang Indonesia. Jadi sebagai alternatif saya tuliskan seperti di bawah ini :

Sehabis pulang kerja hari ini tadi saya tidak membeli es teh hijau di starbucks. Tapi besok pagi saya akan pergi ke Cumberland farms yang terletak di Hadley, Massachusetts untuk membeli es teh dan sehabis pulang kerja besok, saya akan membeli es teh hijau di Starbucks. Saya juga kemungkinan akan membeli seiris pumpkin cheesecake.

== American English for English Learners ==

Seeing the movie "The Maze Runner" with Josh:

Saturday night, I went to Cinemark with Josh and we saw the film "The Maze Runner." I really liked this film. In fact, in my opinion, "The Maze Runner" is a great movie. This weekend, I want to see the movie "Dolphin Tale 2" with my niece Ashlyn.

I also went to the Belchertown fair with Josh on Saturday night. We met his friends there. I bought two Italian sausages, 2 soft serve ice creams in waffle cones, and a pumpkin beer. I also bought an amethyst necklace. After the fair, Josh and I relaxed in his hot tub.

After work today, I didn't buy an iced green tea at Starbucks but tomorrow morning, I'm going to Cumberland Farms in Hadley to buy an iced tea and after work tomorrow, I am going to buy an iced green tea at Starbucks. I might buy a slice of pumpkin cheesecake too.

September 23, 2014
kamu suka maze runner ?? aku tak tahu apakah aku harus melihatnya atau tak.
September 28, 2014
As Rifki said, "faktanya" isn't the right choice of words. Since you put it to emphasize the sentence (your opinion), it's better if you use "bahkan". Also, I'm not sure if it's just a figure of speech and I don't know how Americans use "in fact" exactly, but I don't think you should follow "In fact" with an opinion. Anyway, great job Shawn! Come al solito ;)
September 24, 2014
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