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Mr. Grey The morning was bright but his heart was dark. He didn't know how he could change the situation. He was a sad man, even his name was sad, Grey, like a grey day where the rain brokes yours plans. For this reason he never got close to Summer, she was too much brillliant. In spite of he was crazy in love with she, he tought she deserves someone better. So, day to day he walked to the park and sat on a bench, from here he saw her. And fell in love more... and suffer more... He was present the day she met his boyfriend, the same man that would be her husband years later. This is the story the grey man, that loved too much but she never knew it.
Oct 1, 2014 11:03 AM
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Mr. Grey

The morning was bright but his heart was dark. He didn't know how he could change the situation. He was a sad man, even his name was sad, Grey, like a grey day where the rain brokes  spoils yours your plans.

For this reason he never got close to Summer, she was too much too brillliant.
In spite of this he was crazy madly in love with she her, he tought  thought she deserves  deserved someone better. So, day to  after day he walked to the park and sat on a bench, from here there he saw her. And fell in love more... and suffer suffered more... He was present the day she met his her boyfriend, the same man that would be her husband years later.

This is the story of the grey man, that loved her too much but she never knew it.

 

Very good, most corrections are to create more natural English. Well done.

October 1, 2014
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