You Jin
The story of the game, <iTool> The story of founding a country with the arrow ’Jo’ and the naive prince, The incompetent ninja’s love story with the shuriken ’Bi’, The episode about the war and plot with the bullet ‘Cal’ and the sniper who ate like a pig, This all story huddling together makes a mood of ‘iTool’. In addition, There are lots of story we’re preparing, like the story of the hunter who threw guns away for hunting, instead of shooting despite of gun’s usability in the wild west, the reversal game of the pitcher who was always considered as a backup player, and the story of the female tribal chief who hunted men.
Oct 2, 2014 1:20 PM
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The story of the game, <iTool>

The story of founding a country with the arrow ’Jo’ and the naive prince,
The incompetent ninja’s love story with the shuriken ’Bi’,
The episode about the war and plot with the bullet ‘Cal’ and the sniper who ate like a pig,
This all story huddling together makes a mood of ‘iTool’.
In addition, There are lots of story we’re preparing, like the story of the hunter who threw guns away for hunting, instead of shooting despite of gun’s usability in the wild west, the reversal game of the pitcher who was always considered as a backup player, and the story of the female tribal chief who hunted men.

 

 

The story of the game, <iTool>

 

This game has many stories.

The story of the foundation of  a country with the arrow ’Jo’ and the naive prince,
The incompetent ninja’s love story with the shuriken ’Bi’,
The episode about the War and the history of  with the bullet ‘Cal’ and the sniper who ate like a pig,
All these stories   blending together set the  mood of ‘iTool’.
In addition, there are lots of stories that  we’re preparing, like the story of the hunter who threw away his trusty hunting rifles guns away for hunting, instead of shooting despite of gun’s usability in the wild west, <em>the reversal game</em> of the pitcher who was always considered as a backup player, and the story of the female tribal chief who hunted men.

 

Notes:

the episode about the war - If this was an exceptionally well known war , you would write - the episode about the War. You probably should use War - this indicates that it is a potential major theme in your game. You don't have to develop that theme, but it is something that you could provide ocassional items about. Something that provokes interest and intrigue. using War means that this is a major story that might be told.

 

If this was just any war, you would write - the episode about a war.

 

guns - the military use the word gun to refer to a heavy weapon that fires a large projectile.

Soldiers carry rifles and pistols. Hunters usually carry rifles.

 

<em>the reversal game of the pitcher</em> - could you also say - <em>the behind story of the pitcher.</em> ?

 

instead of shooting despite of gun’s usability in the wild west, - I am not sure that this part fits in. I don't think that an English reader would associate "wild west" with hunting.

Trusty hunting rifles - this term covers "guns for hunting" + "gun's usability"

 

October 3, 2014
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