Impromptu Speech Exercise 5

Topic 5: Actors and professional athletes are paid too much.

Some people argue that actors and professional athletes are paid too much. But in to my mind [1], there are various reasons why they are worthy of the high salaries.

First, the prosperity of the industry partly determines their salaries. The industry industries [2] of entertainment and sports are known as high-profited [3]. A fan of an actor can pay hundreds of dollars for supporting the actor's' works, while a fan of an athlete may pay hundreds of dollars per ticket. Part of the high revenues generated in these industries will go to the pockets of actors and professional athletes, which decides their high incomes.

Second, the talents for becoming an actor or a professional athlete are in short supply and thus highly appreciated. From an economic view, it is also reasonable to pay higher prices for a rare quality [4].

Third, both actors and professional athletes face enormous risks,.  For example, an unintentional scar [5] on an actor's face, or an humiliating slip on the stage may harm his career. For athletes, an seemingly small but incurable wound in any match they attend,  may destroy their careers forever. They are facing high risks when they work, and high incomes usually accompany high risks, which also justifies their high earning.

Some people criticize them for receiving too much salary money [6], however, I think they are worth it because of the special nature of the industry industries, the rarity of their talents and the incredibly high risks they are confronted confront. Thank you!
 

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[1] In terms of grammar, it is fine to write "In my mind."  However, as an alternative to "In my opinion," the expression we use is "To my mind."

[2] Entertainment and sports are two separate industries, and therefore we need to use the plural form of the noun.  Yet other industries may be very closely aligned, in which case we can indeed use the singular form of the noun.  Compare these two sentences:

"The film and television industry is very profitable."

"The entertainment and sports industries are very profitable."

[3] This sentence reads awkwardly to a native speaker.  Here's how I would write the same sentence:

"The entertainment and sports industries are highly profitable."

Alternatively:

"Entertainment and professional sports are high-profit industries."

(There's no need to say "are known as".)

[4] A better word, in this context, would be 'skill':

"... it is also reasonable to pay higher prices for a rare skill."

[5] The phrase "unintentional scar" suggests that some people may have an intentional scar.  The usual phrase is "a scar from an accident", though that phrase would not sit comfortably in your sentence.  Therefore, it may be better to rework the sentence:

"For example, a scar from an accident or a humiliating slip on the stage may harm an actor's career."

[6] A salary is a single, countable amount.  Compare these two phrase:

"He received a too-high salary."

"He received too much money."

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This is a very well-written essay.  Great job!

Impromptu Speech Exercise 5

Topic 5: Actors and professional athletes are paid too much.

Some people argue that actors and professional athletes are paid too much. But in my mind, there are various reasons why they are worthy of the 1*high salaries.

First, the prosperity of the industry partly determines their salaries. The industry of entertainment and sports are known as high-profited. A fan of an actor can pay hundreds of dollars for supporting to support 2* the actors' works, while a fan of an athlete may pay hundreds of dollars per ticket. Part of the high revenues generated in these industries will go to the pockets of actors and professional athletes, which decides their high income.

Second, the talents for becoming an actor or a professional athlete are in short supply and thus highly appreciated. From an economic view, it is also reasonable to pay higher prices for a rare quality.

Third 3*, both actors and professional athletes face enormous risks, for example, an unintentional scar on an actor's face, or an humiliating slip on the stage may harm his career. For athletes, an seemingly small but incurable wound in any match they attend 4*, may destroy their careers forever. They are facing high risks when they work, and high incomes usually accompany high risks, which also justifies their high earning.

Some people criticize them for receiving too much salary, however, I think they are worthy of it because of the special nature of the industry, the rarity of their talents and the incredibly high risks they are confronted with. Thank you!

Thank you for any advice or correction!

1* maybe - these - as they are salaries.

2* I'm not sure I understand you. They pay hundreds of dollars by going to see the film lots of times?

3* Third, fourth, fifth, etc are fine but I think it is not to hard to use alternatives 'Last but by no menas least', 'Finally let's not forget', 'It's also worth pointing out'. It can be argued that this type of expression is less monotounous and may add emphasis and attract the attention of the reader, listener. In the context of a speech indicating that this is the last point can help the audience understand the whole argument.

4* as the athletes are participating I would maybe use 'take part in'.

The sentence I liked best is:

<em>Part of the high revenues generated in these industries will go to the pockets of actors and professional athletes, which decides their high income. </em>