(here are my other comments, Italki wouldn't let me save them all above)

A note about Italki: It is better to write shorter notebook entries, more people will read and correct them, because it takes time! You can split a story over 2 notebooks...

All states have 2-letter abbreviations, but they are rarely used when writing for audiences outside your local area. So I changed to Texas. However, "College Station, TX" is an address, so the TX is fine here.

Almost all the corrections are for plural/singlular, and prepositions: of to and the etc. It is very common for people with native Asian languages to omit these because they are not used to them. (Except Japanese maybe.)

"My favorite hobbies were watching" - were is past tense. I didn't change it, but later on, it sounds like you are still in Texas. If you are still there, then you would use 'are' not 'were'.

The opposite of good it bad, the opposite of best is worst.

'moving to Texas' use to, it is a direction

'those.. kinds.. hobbies.. things' all plural

'here is my list of characteristics that are needed' List is singular so use 'is'. Characteristics are plural, so 'are needed'. Yes English is hard!

'I' is correctly capitalized, but 'it' should not be capitalized

You write very well, and you write advanced sentances, good for you! It is fun to read because you write about your personal observations and feelings. Please don't be discouraged! Thank you I enjoyed it. And you nailed it with your description of Texans and midwesterners!

How can I live in TX more fun. How can I have more fun living in Texas?

My favorite hobbies were watching an independent movies in Cinecube, an independent cinema,  and going to an art gallery during the weekdays. One of the good things was while working as a nurse  was that I can get a day off during the week. It could also be the worst a bad thing as nurses can not have enough time with their family and friends on weekends. Anyhow, it was the best way to spend my day off on weekdays independently instead of complaining about not often having holidays on weekends. [good attitude!] Even though the smaller cinemas which usually show low-cost, artistic and independent films are facing financial difficulties and are going out of business in South Korea like in the USA, it is easier for Seoul citizens to access various independent movies and culture events than New Yorkers, at least in terms of affordable prices. [excellent long sentance!] After moving in to Texas, that those kinds of hobbies are quite luxurious things unless I live in NY.

How to have more fun living in the USA is a topic that has captured me. Here are is my list of what characteristics is are needed to live have fun in Texas. ( I only know about living in College Station, TX, I can not say I know about living in the USA )

The person is a big fan of sports.
The person is a devout Christian.
The person is a workaholic.
The person is an academic and a bookworm.
The person likes crafting or DIY.
The person is super-rich so.. he can travel everywhere.

Reading books or joining a painting club would be the most stable suitable? method for me. For starters, reading a book would be a realistic option for me. As soon as taking I took part in a book club, I have realized that reading English novels is more difficult than news or  medical books because of a wide range of adjectives and adverbs that I do not know the exact those meanings of. However, I want to keep sticking to reading different kinds of English books. At one of friends’ request to recommend a book written by a Korean author, I visited in Barnes & Nobles at in my town today. It is good to see that Korean author’s novels and not an outdated book citied about the Korean war are placed a on the shelf. [another excellent sentence] I expected that I it would be easy to sympathize with the book as the book portrayed a dedicated Korean mother. However, I was hardly able to be moved by the book. Even though I grasped the content, because it was written in English, I could not taste and feel English the contents and be immersed in emotion unlike Korean books. Even if I found an independent movie in my town, it would be the same situation. My English ability just remains communication of content and not deeply and elaborately expressing my feelings and ideas. I sometimes think to be a perfect bilingual person would be is an impossible goal. However, I wish I can understand and enjoy English more to make my life colorful.