Nadia
hello i need some help with this first person narrative At year 9th high school, my mom gave me a pepper gas to protected myself from the thieves because a week earlier a thief trying to steal me when I was returning home from high school. That morning at high school seemed to be a normal one. We were in language class and we were doing our homework. But I didn't realize that my classmate beside me,who was my friend, was looking for something inside my school bag and she found my pepper gas. She started to ask me "what was it?"and " what could it do?". As her, i also wanted to know so I pressed the pepper gas' button over her arm's skin. Suddenly, all the class started coughing and my friend got worse,she couldn't even stop coughing and her face changed to red. All of us had to get out from the classroom. My language teacher called the director,who called the ambulance. The director was so angry with me,he called my mother and she didn't believe what I had done. Meanwhile,the doctors were treating my classmate in other room from the school, and then my mother came to school to talk with the director. Finally, my friend got better because of the doctors' help. I felt very guilty and worry for her,and I was so ashamed of the situation. The director told my mother that he didn't going to expulse me from high school but after that,my mother never gave me a pepper gas again.
Oct 22, 2014 8:45 PM
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hello i need some help with this first person narrative

In the ninth grade (or in my freshman year of high school), my mom gave me a pepper gas some pepper spray to protected myself from thieves because a week earlier, a thief tried to rob trying to steal me when I was returning home from high school. That morning at high school seemed to be a normal one. We were in language class and we were doing our homework. But I didn't realize that my classmate who was beside me, and who was also my friend, was looking for something inside my school bag. She found my pepper spray. She started to asked me "what is was it?" and "what can could it do?". Like As her, I also wanted to know, so I pressed the pepper spray's button over the skin of her arm's skin. Suddenly, all the entire class started coughing and it was even worse for my friend. She couldn't even stop coughing and her face changed to became red. All of us had to get out of from the classroom. My language teacher called the director and he ,who called for an the ambulance. The director was so angry with me. He called my mother and she couldn't didn't believe what I had done. Meanwhile, the doctors were treating my classmate in another other room of from the school. Before long, she was better because of the doctors' help. My mother then came to my school to talk with the director. I felt very guilty and worry worried for her, and I was so ashamed of the situation. The director told my mother that he wasn't didn't going to expel expulse me from high school but after that, my mother never gave me a pepper spray gas again.

 

October 22, 2014
Can anybody correct it? Please
October 22, 2014
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