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Go Through Sending The People You Have Known I doesn't really mean i am going through the death of the people who i have known, just want to talk about the thing i can experience anytime, like sending your friends to abroad or far city from your hometown. This morning, a friend of mine went back to her hometown and it made me feel sad. Truth be told, Becoming friends with her was not that long, maybe just a couple of months ago. Of course we can keep in touch each other, but i know its not rather than face-to-face meeting. but if i really want to see her face, i think i can do that if we have the time on hand. Its getting easier thanks to developing IT technology or something. Especially, i wanna thank to Skype helping the people all over the world to keep in touch well. For using that, i have talked with my foreign friends. When i was in China, i made some foreign friends and our relationship was really great and always took care each other sincerely. But i knew that we have to say goodbye to each other soon. We can meet sometime luckily, but its more realistic that we cant meet just once for entire life. Plus, i barely use Facebook and Korea and other countries(except for Japan) has a leg jet, the more far the much i have time difference. If there is a greeting, there is always farewell. I know its natural and "have to accept" thing. Still i am not accustomed to it a little bit, Greetings and farewell can coexist so i would expect someone else.
Oct 24, 2014 4:34 AM
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Go Through Sending The People You Have Known

I doesn't really mean i am going through the death of the people who i have known,

just want to talk about the thing i can experience anytime, like sending your friends to abroad or far city from your hometown.

This morning, a friend of mine went back to her hometown and it made me feel sad.

Truth be told, Becoming friends with her was not that long, maybe just a couple of months ago.

Of course we can keep in touch each other, but i know its not rather than face-to-face meeting.

but if i really want to see her face, i think i can do that if we have the time on hand.

Its getting easier thanks to developing IT technology or something.

Especially, i wanna thank to Skype helping the people all over the world to keep in touch well.

For using that, i have talked with my foreign friends. When i was in China, i made some foreign friends

and our relationship was really great and always took care each other sincerely.

But i knew that we have to say goodbye to each other soon. We can meet sometime luckily, but its more realistic that we cant meet just once for entire life.

Plus, i barely use Facebook and Korea and other countries(except for Japan) has a leg jet, the more far the
much i have time difference.

If there is a greeting, there is always farewell. I know its natural and "have to accept" thing.

Still i am not accustomed to it a little bit, Greetings and farewell can coexist so i would expect someone else.

 

First pass - spelling and capitalization

Go Through Sending The People You Have Known

I doesn't really mean I am going through the death of the people who I have known,

just want to talk about the thing I can experience anytime, like sending your friends to abroad or far city from your hometown.

This morning, a friend of mine went back to her hometown and it made me feel sad.

Truth be told, Becoming friends with her was not that long, maybe just a couple of months ago.

Of course we can keep in touch each other, but I know its not rather than face-to-face meeting.

but if I really want to see her face, I think I can do that if we have the time on hand.

Its getting easier thanks to developing IT technology or something.

Especially, I  want to thank to Skype helping the people all over the world to keep in touch well.

For using that, I have talked with my foreign friends. When I was in China, I made some foreign friends

and our relationship was really great and always took care each other sincerely.

But I knew that we have to say goodbye to each other soon. We can meet sometime luckily, but its more realistic that we cant meet just once for entire life.

Plus, I barely use Facebook and Korea and other countries(except for Japan) has a leg jet, the more far the
much I have time difference.

If there is a greeting, there is always farewell. I know its natural and "have to accept" thing.

Still I am not accustomed to it a little bit, Greetings and farewell can coexist so I would expect someone else.

 

Second pass - tense and wording

Going through sending off the people that you have known.

 

I don't really mean I am going through the death of the people who I have known, I just want to talk about something that  I can experience anytime, like sending your friends to abroad or to a far off city from your hometown. (<em>you don't need to include from your hometown. I believe that you are talking about this in general, as you say that you had the same experience in China</em>)

This morning, a friend of mine went back to her hometown and it made me feel sad. Truth be told, I was not friends with  her for long, maybe just a couple of months ago. (<em>you don't need to say ago, the rest of your sentence is talking about the past, so ago is redundant.)</em>

Of course we can keep in touch  with each other, but I know its not rather than like a face-to-face meeting, but if I really want to see her face, I think I can do that if we have the time on hand.

Its getting easier thanks to developments in  IT technology. or something.

Especially, I want to thank to Skype for helping the people all over the world to keep in touch well. <em>(I don't believe an English speakers would say well at this point.)</em>

For using that, By using that, I have talked with my foreign friends. When I was in China, I made some foreign friends   and our relationship was really great and  we always took care of each other sincerely. But I knew that we have had to say goodbye to each other soon. We can meet sometime luckily, but its more realistic that we cant meet just once for entire life. With luck, we might meet again sometime but more realistically we won't meet again in our entire lives.

Plus, I barely use Facebook and Korea and other countries(except for Japan) have a  a leg jet, the more far the much I have time difference time difference that increases with distance.

If there is a greeting, there is always a farewell. I know its natural and "have to accept" thing a thing that  and it's something that I have to accept.

Still I am not accustomed to it a little bit, Still I am only slightly accustomed to it but greetings and farewell can coexist so I would expect to meet someone else.

<em>You can leave out the word would, it is not an error, but is unnecessary.</em>

 

Notes: You have left too much spacing between individual sentences which makes it slightly harder to read. Group related sentences together into paragraphs.

Your story is very good. I had no trouble understanding what you have written.

 

 

October 26, 2014
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Going Through Letting The People You Have Known Go

 

It doesn't really mean I am grieving the death of the people who I have known, I just want to talk about the thing I can experience anytime such as letting your friends go abroad or to a city that is far away from your hometown.

This morning, a friend of mine went back to her hometown and it made me feel sad.

Truth be told, our friendship wasn't life-long, I struck up a friendship with her maybe a few months ago.

Of course, we can keep in touch with each other, but i know its not the same as meeting face-to-face.

If i really want to see her face, I think I can do that if we have the time on hands.

It's getting easier thanks to VoIP technologies.

In particular, I would like to thank Skype for helping the people all over the world to keep in touch well.

I talk to my foreign friends using that. When I was in China, I made some friends and our relationship was really great and we always sincerely took care of each other.

But I knew that we had to say goodbye to each other soon. Hopefully, we can meet some time, but we are unlikely to meet ever again.


Plus, i barely use Facebook and Korea and other countries(except for Japan) has a leg jet, the more far the
much i have time difference.

 

I barely use Facebook because Korean and other Asian countries have their own services. Furthermore, there's a time difference between us.


Greeting is always followed by farewell. I know it's natural and have to accept this thing.

Still I am not accustomed to it a little bit, Greetings and farewell can coexist so i would expect someone else. I don't seem to be able to correct this one :(

October 24, 2014
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