SongKe
A pair of cheap NewBalance shoes Just now, I bought a pair of NewBalance sport shoes. The price is 299 CNY, almost equal to 40~50 USD. I found the shoes are made of 越南(how to spell it in English). I think the shoes must not be the latest new style.
Oct 26, 2014 6:51 AM
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Here is an entry which is similar to your style of Notebook entries:

 

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Today I woke up at 7am.

I brushed my teeth and showered.

I then had an omelete for breakfast.

I arrived at work at 9am.

I am a computer technician.

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A "paragraph" will collect all related sentences together.  Here is the same entry, this time using paragraphs:

 

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Today I woke up at 7am. I brushed my teeth and showered. I then had an omelete for breakfast.

 

I arrived at work at 9am. I am a computer technician.

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The first three sentences form one paragraph, because they all talk about what you did at home.  The last two sentences form a new paragraph, because they talk about a new topic: your work.

 

Now that we have collected sentences together as paragraphs, we can either introduce "conjunctions" or remove words to join some sentences together.  For example:

 

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Today I woke up at 7am, brushed my teeth and showered. I then had an omelete for breakfast.

 

I arrived at work at 9am, where I am a computer technician.

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I hope this illustrates what is a "paragraph" in English writing.

October 27, 2014
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A pair of cheap New Balance shoes

Just now, I bought a pair of New Balance sport shoes.
The price is was 299 CNY, almost equal to between 40 and 50 USD.
I found the shoes are made of 越南 in Vietnam. [1]
I think the shoes must not be the latest new style.

 

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[1] I think you should obtain a language translator.  Generally you should not use a translator, and instead do your best to write your own English.  You do this, which is great.  But if you come to a word which you truly don't know, use a translator rather than writing the Chinese word.

 

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As I mentioned in another of your Notebook entries, I think you should learn about a "paragraph" in written English.  Using paragraphs would make your writing much more natural.

October 27, 2014

A pair of cheap NewBalance shoes

Just now, I bought a pair of NewBalance sport shoes.
The price is 299 CNY, almost equal to about/approximately 40~50 USD.
I found the shoes are made in Vietnam of 越南(how to spell it in English).
I think the shoes must/are certainly not be the latest new style.

October 27, 2014

A pair of cheap New Balance shoes

I bought a pair of New Balance sport shoes just right now.
The price is 299 CNY, that is around 40~50 in USD.
And I found that the shoes are made in Vietnam.
But I guess the style is not the latest trend in the market.

 

October 26, 2014

A pair of cheap NewBalance shoes

Just now, I bought a pair of NewBalance sport shoes.
The price was 299 CNY, almost equal to 40~50 USD.
I found the shoes are made of 越南(how to spell it in English).
I think the shoes must not be in the latest style.
January 26, 2016
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