Review about the film “Edward Scissorhands”. If someone could correct it I would be grateful!

Laura

Apr 15, 2021 9:15 PM

Here is my suggestion: Edward Scissorhands is a fantasy film set in a US town/city/suburb/neighbourhood. It was written and directed by Tim Burton and stars Johnny Depp and Winona Ryder. In the movie/film an elderly inventor creates a boy, but he is not an ordinary boy as he has scissors instead of hands. The elderly man dies before he can finish him. He decides to hide where he was created, until one day when a woman finds him and decides to take him home with her. And that is when Edward’s new life begins. We can say that the special effects are/were very good for the period in which the film was released. We have to be aware that in 1990 they didn’t have the same resources as we do now. In addition to the special effects (we can say that) the soundtrack is terrific, it transmits a lot of emotions. It is a film that grabbed my attention from the first moment. Maybe it’s because of the talented cast, the fantastic director and the unusual and amazing plot. I think (that) everybody should watch this movie. N.B. You used the British spelling of "neighbourhood" :) but you used the American word "movie" (British: "film"). It might be useful to stick to either British or American English.

What you wrote was really very good :) :) I would point out the following minor points about your version: 2nd paragraph – stick to the present tense as you are describing what happens in the story. Also, "the movie is about an old man…" makes it sound like the elderly man has the main role in the film. "Elderly" is more polite than "old" when talking about a person. 3rd paragraph - … same resources as WE do now (you’re comparing people in general at two different times, rather than the same people at different times, so "we" works better. You could also say e.g. "In 1990 we had less resources than we do now"). 4th paragraph – I would expect "personally" to be followed by "I", e.g. "I think/found that...". You can just remove "personally" here as the rest of the sentence makes it clear you're talking about your experience of the film. I think e.g. "That director" on its own can sound a little disapproving, like "that man is so impolite", which then makes the sentence seem paradoxical because you instead say "fantastic" ! I'd just use "the" instead.

April 15, 2021

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