Answer: I’m applying for admission to the MBA program in Business Administration because I want to further my developing career and emerge my competencies in finance, marketing, human resources, strategy, and leadership. I’ve been working for the US Army-Camp Humphreys, South Korea since October 2016. I have been continuing to develop my career (progress) and I have now been working for the Defense Health Agency (DHA) as a Management assistant since June 2022. My job is to provide direct support to Manpower analysts and support an automated system, Defense Human Resource System on the internet (DMHRSi) to collect personnel workload within US military hospital treatment facilities throughout the Korean Peninsula. I want to explore more about management knowledge and study which will lead to management of staff and support originations effectively and strategically. My ultimate career goal is to work as a Management Analyst in the Resource management division for DHA. The Master of Business Administration at the University of Maryland Global Campus will provide me with opportunities to learn more about higher education and prepare me to be a management analyst in my job area. I hope to equip myself with advanced analytical tools and techniques that will foster managerial efficiency. This is a very well written response. I did notice that you missed out the article 'the' in a few places which I have added in the copied text above so you can compare your notes. I also noticed some minor confusion with the present perfect tense using 'since'. See my version for the correct phrasing. I'd love the opportunity to work with you on these minor errors so if you're interested in a class please don't hesitate to contact me. You did a great job though. Well done!