Jason
People benefit more from traveling to foreign countreis Hello everyone, thank you for your time to reading my essay.And I wish you can correct my essay.Thank You very much again. the question of essay is as following: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from travel. As we all know,people can get a deep acquaintance about the destination very much including the culture and custom,goods price, and so on if they travel in their own country.If I had the choice,I would travel to foreign countries.We can experence the new culture and custom,meet many friends and see a lot of beautiful scenes. First, we can explore a totally different culture and cultures through our visit to foreign countries.In the world there are more than 200 countries and region and usually every countries has many peoples,which has at least 1000 culture and custom.Therefore we can experience many kinds of cultures and custom during our traveling their countries.It is very corlorful and interesting. Second,we have the opportunity to meet many friends from all over the world if we travel to foreign countries.We can communicate foreigners about some common interests wherever they come from.The people from different countries has their special characters which maybe give us a mazing ideas that we have never thought and heard before.For instance,Indian people love the cow and they think them respected thing and people need to respect the cow. Third and last,we can see different and beautiful scenes from all over the world.Every place has their attractive and forgotable points.For example,DIZHONGHAI is a strange sea,it never drop into the water when people lie on the water. In a word, I totally think people can benifit a lot from travelling to foreign countries which can not be attained if they travel in their own country.
Jun 24, 2012 2:43 PM
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As we all know,people who travel within their own country can get a deep acquaintance about become well acquainted with the destination very much including the culture and customs, goods prices, and so on if they travel in their own country.If I had the choice,I would travel to foreign countries. We can experence the new culture and customs, meet many make new friends and see a lot of beautiful scenes.


First, we can explore a totally different culture and cultures through our visit to foreign countries.In the world there are more than 200 countries and regions, and usually every countries country has many peoples,which has have at least 1000 cultures and customs.Therefore, we can experience many kinds of cultures and customs during our by traveling their countries. It is very corlorful and interesting.

 

Second,we have the opportunity to meet make many friends from all over the world if we travel to foreign countries. We can communicate foreigners about some common interests, wherever they come from. The people from different countries has have their special characters unique mentality which maybe give us amazing ideas that we have never thought and or heard of before. For instance,Indian people love the cow and they think consider them respected thing sacred and people need to respect the cow

Third and last,we can see different and beautiful natural scenes scenery from all over the world. Every place has their attractive and forgotable unforgettable points. For example, DIZHONGHAI in the Mediterranean Sea is a strange sea, it never drop into the water when people lie on the water you can lie on the water and float without sinking.
In a word summary, I totally think people can benifit a lot from travelling to foreign countries in ways which can not be attained if they travel in their own country.

 

Notes:

Add a space after each comma (,) but not before. Example: I like apples, pears, and bananas.

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June 28, 2012
Than you very much for advice.MOON min seong.
June 26, 2012
Here are some tips when writing an essay, for the format and organization : 1. introduction - overview (what you are witing about) - Your point of view on the essay - thesis statement - three topic sentences of the point going to be discussed 2. Body - let each new discussion point be in a new paragraph and organize as follows : Statement (the point being made) : Evidence (if available) : Analysis of point made (how your statement applies to essay topic) : Link(how your topic sentnce relates to the next) 3. Conclusion - Overview of topic sentences - Relation of topic sentence to the essay topic - Final thoughts of what learnt and rewrite thesis statement from introduction. message me if you need any help :D
June 25, 2012
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