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Self-introduction for BEC Vantage Test,Can you help improve it ? Good afternoon, I am glad to be here, First ,let me briefly introduce myself. My name is Zengtefei, I come from Hunnang, I major in Chemical Engineering. However I like English Language as much as Chemistry. Fortunately, I have found my first job at HONDA due to my qualifications.. In my spare time, I enjoy music, sports, especially basketball, and studying the English language. By and large, I am an easy-going person and I enjoy communicating with people. I like to make friends and in fact I have many friends. Besides, I am quite active and energetic. and I don’t like leaving things half done; When I have a project to do, I do it thoroughly and on time. In addition, I am organized; I have many duties when I am the Monitor, so I organize a schedule and prioritize my jobs. Finally I was awarded with the title of Outstanding League Member. As for study, I'm a fast learner I didn't know anything about computers before attending a University. It was difficult at first but I studied hard, got high marks and can use it effectively now. I always believe that one can too easily lag behind unless one keeps on learning. In order to improve my English, I often go to English Corner to practice my oral English. I have passed College English Test, Band Six with high marks. Just like passing an exam, I believe that problems are really challenges and that I can solve them. However, I know my English has room for improvement. I will continue studying for leisure. Thanks for your attention!
Nov 22, 2010 7:41 AM
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Self-introduction for BEC Vantage Test,Can you help improve it ?

Good afternoon, I am glad to be here.  First, let me briefly introduce myself.  My name is Zengtefei and I come from Hunnang.   I'm majoring in Chemical Engineering, however I like studying the English Language as much as studying Chemistry. Fortunately, because of my qualifications, I've landed my first job at HONDA.

In my spare time, I enjoy music, sports (especially basketball) and studying the English language.
By and large, I am an easy-going person and I enjoy communicating with people. I like to make friends and in fact I have many friends. Besides, I am quite active and energetic. <strike>and</strike>  I don’t like leaving things half done; When I have a project to do, I do it thoroughly and on time. In addition, I am organized; I have many duties when I am the Monitor, so I organize a schedule and prioritize jobs well.   I was also awarded with the title of Outstanding League Member.

When it come to my studies, I'm a fast learnerI didn't know anything about computers before attending a University. It was difficult at first but I studied hard and got high marks and can use my computer skills very effectively now. I have always believed that unless a person continues to learn they can quickly lag behind the times. <strike> unless one keeps on learning</strike>.
 
In order to improve my English, I often go to The English Corner to practice spoken English. I have passed The College English Test, Band Six with high marks. Just like passing an exam, I believe that problems are really just challenges and <strike>that</strike> I can solve them, however, I know my English has room for improvement.  I will continue studying English in my leisure time.(free time)  <strike> </strike><strike>for leisure</strike>. Thanks for your attention!

You're welcome.  ^^ Congratulations  on you job with Honda!  I drive a Honda.  Ha ha.

Red                  = Capitalization<o:p></o:p>

Blue                 =  Correction and Spelling<o:p></o:p>

Green               =  A more natural way to say / more common<o:p></o:p>

Purple               =  My comment or suggestion<o:p></o:p>

Underline          =  Punctuation  and/ or  spacing<o:p></o:p>

November 24, 2010
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