Self-introduction for BEC Vantage Test,Can you help improve it ?
Good afternoon, I am glad to be
here. First, let me briefly introduce myself. My name is Zengtefei
and I come from
Hunnang. I'm major
ing in Chemical Engineering
, however I like
studying the English Language as much as
studying Chemistry. Fortunately,
because of my qualifications, I've landed my first job at HONDA.
In my spare time, I enjoy music, sports
(especially basketball
) and studying the English language.
By and large, I am an easy-going person and I enjoy communicating with people. I like to make friends and in fact I have many friends. Besides, I am quite active and energetic. <strike>and</strike> I don’t like leaving things half done; When I have a project to do, I do it thoroughly and on time. In addition, I am organized; I have many duties when I am the Monitor, so I organize a schedule and prioritize
jobs well. I was also awarded with the title of Outstanding League Member.
When it come to my studies, I'm a fast learner
. I didn't know anything about computers before attending a University. It was difficult at first but I studied hard
and got high marks and can use
my computer skills very effectively now. I
have always believ
ed that
unless a person continues to learn they can quickly lag behind the times. <strike> unless one keeps on learning</strike>.
In order to improve my English, I often go to
The English Corner to practice
spoken English. I have passed
The College English Test, Band Six with high marks. Just like passing an exam, I believe that problems are really
just challenges and <strike>that</strike> I can solve them
, however, I know my English has room for improvement. I will continue studying
English in my leisure time.(free time) <strike> </strike><strike>for leisure</strike>. Thanks for your attention!
You're welcome. ^^ Congratulations on you job with Honda! I drive a Honda. Ha ha.
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