The academic writing: In today's job market

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In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays there is a strong competition between candidates who have just graduated to land a job in the job market. As the result, practical skills are considered more important than academic qualifications. Some people suppose suggest that job seekers candidates may not need any formal qualifications in the future due to this trend. However, in my opinion, I believe both qualifications and skills are significant important for people to find start to work.

It cannot be denied that the business market are is hungry for skilled employees for because practical skills play an important role in the success of a business. People can bring their experience contracts and other benefits to companies if they're have good at practical skills. Besides, there are Students who have only studied in an academic environment and probably lack the real skills that are necessary for their the workplace in the future. With these students, Companies have to train them these students with in practical skills so that they can work efficiently productively, but this process will take them a lot of time and money. Therefore, instead of hiring inexperienced employees, they will prefer to recruit people with high practical skills to shorten the time of training reduce training times. and This is understandable. For example, in the information technology industry, brands want to hire people with skills of in coding and programming for projects more than ones over those who just only have formal qualifications.

However, in my point of view, we should not underestimate the importance of qualifications for they are a measure of our understanding comprehension about of a particular major field we are involved in. Having a qualification means we have a foundation and a demonstrated ability to move forward build upon in our career. Theory can be a contribution to help us improve in is essential for some professions such as: the medicine industry, the law, etc. In practice, if we can make mistakes without mastering theory for we can't find out what the problems are. It can be seen clearly is clear that theoretical knowledge is also the vital part in doing actions to doing things in practice.

In short, I value both qualifications and practical skills in doing a successful job. They make up together for the benefits for job seekers.

These sentences are a little confused. This is my suggestion:

In short, you are more like to build a successful career with both qualifications and practical skills. Together they make a job seeker a better candidate.

The academic writing: In today's job market

@-@. Thanks for reading my writing. I'm studying myself for the exam so I need your help to improve my writing. I appreciate your help and I'm Vietnamese. If you travel or plan on travelling in my country, I just want to invite you for a cup of coffee as a BIG thanks.

In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays there is a strong competition between candidates who have just graduated to land a job in the job market. As the result, practical skills are considered more important than academic qualifications. People suppose that job candidates may not need any formal qualifications in the future due to this trend. In my opinion, I believe both qualifications and skills are significant for people to start to work.

It cannot be denied that the business market are is hungry for skilled employees, for practical skills play an important role in the success of business. People can bring the contracts and benefits to companies if they're good at practical skills. Besides, there are students who study in a academic environment and lack skills that are necessary for their work in the future. With these students, companies have to train them with practical skills so that they can work efficiently but this process will take them a lot of time and money. Therefore, instead of hiring inexperienced employees, they will recruit people with high skills to shorten the time of training time and this is understandable. For example, in the information technology industry, brands want to hire people with skills of coding and programming for projects more than ones who just have formal qualifications.

However, in my point of view, we should not underestimate the importance of qualifications for they measure our understanding about a particular major we are involved in. Having a qualification means we have a foundation and ability to move forward in our career. Theory can be a contribution to help us improve in some professions such as: the medicine industry, the law, etc. In practice, we can't make mistakes without mastering theory for we can't find out what problems are. It can be seen clearly that theoretical knowledge is also the a vital part in of doing actions.

In short, I value both qualifications and practical skills in doing a successful job. Together, they make up together for the benefits for of job seekers.

You might want to consider using "academic qualifications" or even "degrees" to be more specific.

Your points are good, and your English is very good! :)