Очень неплохо, только Вы вместо звука "р" [r] произносите "л" [l] и нужно немного лучше произносить шипящие. It's pretty good, but you pronounce sound [l] instead of [r] and you should pronounce fricative sounds a little bit better.

There are other nuances but it's very difficult to answer such questions in the Answer section. If I were you, I would post the text you were reading into the Notebook and asked to highlight words or syllables, which you pronounced wrong. I think you would get more feedback.

1) you pronounce Л instead of Р in the words проживём просто варить проживёте проживём придёться 2) you pronounce the words сумеете, сумеете, не суметь, сумеем without У-vowel 3) you pronounce the noun OНА as АННА 4) you pronounce палец instead of пальцы 5) нельзя - the wrong accent (you should stress the last syllable)

Your most serious problem is rhythm, intonation and prosody. It is not surprising, as you are Chinese and your langauge is tonal:) Try to work on intonation first.