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In the story, Percy Jackson has a nightmare about Grover. In the nightmare, he sees Grover is run from an enemy and hiding in a bridal shop. At school, a group of Laestrygonians attacked Percy and his friends with a fireball while they were played dodgeball. Percy has rescued his friends and also Tyson. Annabeth took Percy and Tyson back to the camp in the Gray's taxi, but when they arrived, they find themselves being attack by two bronze Colchis bull. Percy tell Annabeth of his dream and she was sure that Grover had found the Golden Fleece, which could heal the Thalia tree. On the way to the Sea of Monsters, CSS Birmingham was destroyed by Charybdis and attacked by Scylla. Tyson and Clarisse dead, Percy and Annabeth escaped and came to an island, where they saw and found "CC's Spa and Resort". CC takes Annabeth on a tour of the island. She showed Percy her magic and give him a potion, but when he drank the potion, he became a pig and CC locked him in the cage with six other pigs. Percy transformed back into the human with Blackbeard. Percy and Annabeth drifted to the island of Polyphemus and met again Tyson and Clarisse. They rescue Grover, find the Golden Fleece, and returned to the mainland. Returned to the camp, Chiron got his job back. Clarisse covered the Thalia tree with the Golden Fleece and it healed and revived the tree. The sea of monster was such interesting and humourous as The Lightning Thief, and I enjoyed the creative of the story. The story also teach me that don't rate on how someone looks, rate them on how they act.
19 avr. 2023 14:05
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In the story, Percy Jackson has a nightmare about Grover. In the nightmare, he sees Grover running from an enemy and hiding in a bridal shop. At school, a group of Laestrygonians attacks Percy and his friends with a fireball while they are playing dodgeball. Percy rescues his friends and also Tyson. Annabeth takes Percy and Tyson back to the camp in the Gray's taxi [not sure if "the Gray" is right or not because I don't know what it is.], but when they arrive, they find themselves being attacked by two bronze Colchis bulls. Percy tells Annabeth of his dream and she is sure that Grover has found the Golden Fleece, which could heal the Thalia tree. On the way to the Sea of Monsters, the CSS Birmingham is destroyed by Charybdis and attacked by Scylla. Tyson and Clarisse die, Percy and Annabeth escape and arrive at an island, where they see and find "CC's Spa and Resort". CC takes Annabeth on a tour of the island. She shows Percy her magic and gives him a potion, but when he drinks the potion, he becomes a pig, and CC locks him in a cage with six other pigs. Percy (later) transforms back into a human with Blackbeard. Percy and Annabeth drift [I'm not sure if this is the right verb. It suggests they had no control over their destination.] to the island of Polyphemus and meet again Tyson and Clarisse. They rescue Grover, find the Golden Fleece, and return to the mainland. Having returned to the camp, Chiron gets his job back. Clarisse covers the Thalia tree with the Golden Fleece and it heals and revives the tree. The Sea of Monsters was as interesting and humourous as The Lightning Thief, and I enjoyed the creativity of the story. The story also taught me not to judge/rate someone on appearance/looks: judge/rate them on how they act.
Good job reading a novel. Very impressive. I know that is very difficult. Your main problem here was just verb tense, and because I haven't read the book and I don't always know what you intended to say, I'm not sure I corrected it in the right way every time. However, the basic tense to start with when writing about what happens in a novel is the present.
19 avril 2023
In the story, Percy Jackson has a nightmare about Grover. In the nightmare, he sees Grover is run from an enemy and hiding in a bridal shop. At school, a group of Laestrygonians attacked Percy and his friends with a fireball while they were playing dodgeball. Percy has rescued his friends and also Tyson. Annabeth took Percy and Tyson back to the camp in Gray's taxi, but when they arrived, they find themselves being attacked by two bronze Colchis bulls. Percy tell Annabeth of his dream and she was sure that Grover had found the Golden Fleece, which could heal the Thalia tree. On the way to the Sea of Monsters, CSS Birmingham was destroyed by Charybdis and attacked by Scylla. Tyson and Clarisse were dead, Percy and Annabeth escaped and came to an island, where they saw and found "CC's Spa and Resort". CC takes Annabeth on a tour of the island. She showed Percy her magic and give him a potion, but when he drank the potion, he became a pig and CC locked him in the cage with six other pigs. Percy transformed back into a human with Blackbeard. Percy and Annabeth drifted to the island of Polyphemus and met again Tyson and Clarisse. They rescue Grover, find the Golden Fleece, and returned to the mainland. Returned to the camp, Chiron got his job back. Clarisse covered the Thalia tree with the Golden Fleece and it healed and revived the tree. The Sea of Monsters was such interesting and humourous as The Lightning Thief and I enjoyed the creativity of the story. The story also teaches me that don't rate how someone looks, rate them on how they act.
19 avril 2023
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