With regard to developing a healthy lifestyle among students, viewpoints vary. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the view that we should pay attention to (what?) to foster a healthy lifestyle. The benefits of a healthy lifestyle are numerous and manifold. (You need to vary your vocabulary) The first and foremost benefit is the improvement of people's standard of living. The majority of college students tend to absorb bad sleep patterns and eating habits like a sponge. Therefore, only via this search to know that we should cultivate a healthy lifestyle is tremendously important. Another contributor is that all kinds of publicity, be they newspapers or the Internet, advocate vigorously what makes us immerse in the honey of happiness to enhance a good physical and mental well being. To elucidate, it is imperative for students to have a healthy body, because health is the capital of life. In a nutshell, I sincerely express to the school the importance of maintaining a healthy lifestyle for students.

With regard to developing a healthy lifestyle among students, viewpoints vary considerably. As far as I am concerned, I am in line with the view that we should pay attention in order to foster a good healthy lifestyle. (You should indicate what you're paying attention to. Pay attention to what?) The benefits of a healthy lifestyle are numerous and manifold. The first and foremost is the improvement of people's standard of living. Under such a background (I'm not sure what you mean by background.) The majority of college students tend to constantly practice bad sleeping patterns and develop poor eating habits. (Absorbing like a sponge is the wrong simile here.) Therefore, only via this search (which search?) to know (to know what?) can we cultivate a healthy lifestyle, which is tremendously important. Another contributor (contributor to what, the benefits of a healthy lifestyle? It's unclear exactly what you mean.) is that all kinds of sources, be they newspapers or the Internet, vigorously advocate what influences us to immerse in the honey of happiness so we may enhance physical and mental well being. (How do sources of information like newspapers and the internet contribute to the benefits of a healthy lifestyle, or are you suggesting that they somehow result in our choosing a healthy lifestyle?) To elucidate, it is imperative for students to have a healthy body, because health is the capital of life. (Nice phrase, the capital of life.) In a nutshell, I sincerely express to the school the importance of maintaining a healthy lifestyle for students. (Schools can't maintain healthy lifestyles for students, but they can encourage students to maintain their own healthy lifestyles.) You have an excellent vocabulary, but a lot of you ideas are unclear and hard to follow logically. I have helped many students improve their writing and would be glad to help you, too. Look at my profile and let me know.