Carol
blackcat's notebook entry: Jun 11, 2010 The Summary of In My Day Russell Baker portrayed the final days of his mother’s life and the fragmentary memories told by her in In My Day to express his comments on the growth of mankind. Life is anything but a simple matter only contains birth and death. It is a braided cord of humanity stretching up from time long gone. Children always neglect this point and want to create a brand new future of their own like Russell Baker’s mother, himself and his children. They are reluctant to follow their parents’ steps and listen to their recollection which they can see their future from. The fact is their past will finally become our future whether we want to accept it or not, we will shape our own future more successively by the experience we learned from the past.
11 juin 2010 09:37
Corrections · 1

<strike>The</strike> A Summary of In My Day

You should use the indefinite article ("a"), because many different summaries of this book are possible, and the reader didn't know about your summary before. Therefore, he doesn't know which summary you mean. He would say "wait, which summary?" Anytime you say "the dog" or "the cat," and the other person would possibly say "wait - which cat - which concrete, individual cat are you talking about?" - that means you should say "a cat" instead.

However, it would be correct to use the title "The Idea of Tradition in the Book -In My Day-." Even though I don't know this book, I know there is (probably) only one idea of tradition in the book. So I don't say to myself "which idea of tradition in the book is she talking about?"

Russell Baker, in -In My Day-, portrayed the final days of his mother’s life and the fragmentary memories told by her, <strike>in In My Day</strike> to express his comments on the growth of mankind. Life is anything but a <strike>simple matter only contains birth and death</strike>.

Life is anything but a simple matter which only contains birth and death. (relative pronoun, relative clause)

OR

Life is anything but a simple matter containing only birth and death. (present participle clause)


It is a braided cord of humanity stretching up from time long gone. Children always neglect this point and want to create a brand new future of their own like Russell Baker’s mother, himself and his children. They are reluctant to follow their parents’ steps and listen to their recollection from which they can see their future <strike>from</strike>. The fact is their past will finally become our future whether we want to accept it or not, we will shape our own future more <strike>successively </strike>successfully by the experience we learned from the past.

Very good overall. Rich ideas and grammar, and few mistakes.

By the way, I agree with the ideas expressed. America and Western Europe are much less traditionalist than China, which is unfortunate for us. Russia is more traditionalist than we are, but not by all that much.



12 juin 2010
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