Mary
As I am a working professional so I would love to live in the city because there you can get anything whatever you want easily. On the other hand, living in the suburb gives you peace and calmness. You would like the free space over there, no pollution at all and many more things that you're gonna like. The thing which I like the most about city as compared to suburb is more employment and facility for your children as well as your family.
2021년 10월 31일 오후 6:03
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As a working professional, I would love to live in the city, because there one can easily get whatever one wants. On the other hand, living in the suburbs gives one a sense of peace and calmness. One can enjoy free space there, with no pollution at all and many other things to enjoy.
The thing which I like the most about cities as compared to suburbs is that there are more employment opportunities as well as ample facilities for children and families.
Well written! Try to keep "person" ("I", "you") consistent within your writing. If you say, "You would like the free space..." it sounds like you are talking to someone who is thinking about moving. But this essay is about what you prefer for yourself.
2021년 10월 31일
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