YesTomNoJerry
Of all the characters in the Harry Potter universe, Severus Snape may be the most intriguing. He starts off as a cruel professor, one who makes the Boy Who Lived's time at Hogwarts miserable from the start. He then murders Albus Dumbledore, in a twist that left fans reeling. But, by the end, it was revealed he was a good guy and a character with immeasurable depth and intrigue, so much so he probably deserves a standalone book (one day).
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Of all the characters in the Harry Potter universe, Severus Snape is the
most intriguing. He starts off as a cruel professor who makes the Boy Who
Lived's time at Hogwarts miserable from the start. He then murders Albus Dumbledore, in a twist that left fans reeling. But, in the end, it was revealed that he was a good guy and a character of immeasurable depth and intrigue, so much so that he probably deserves a standalone book.
I changed “may be” to “is”. It’s not that “may be” is incorrect but it is generally better to be assertive when you write unless you are going to discuss the other options for the most intriguing character. No need to put “one day” in brackets. Only minor mistakes. Good stuff.
2020년 12월 22일
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