The Tim じぁん!!!
It was a beautiful day. Mom helped me get ready, choosing my outfit and doing my hair and makeup. I even used a bit of her high-end cosmetics. The stage was big, set up in the center of a park. This was definitely the grandest performance I've been a part of. My song was scheduled at the end, and watching everyone else do well boosted my confidence. While I don't think it was perfect, it went smoothly, and the audience cheered. Vivian recorded it, so we can review it in our next vocal lesson and identify areas for improvement.
2024년 11월 30일 오후 12:06
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It was a beautiful day. Mom helped me get ready, choosing my outfit and doing my hair and makeup. I even used a bit of her high-end cosmetics. The stage was big, set up in the center of a park. This was definitely the grandest performance I've been a part of. My song was scheduled at the end, and watching everyone else who came before do well boosted my confidence. While I don't think it was perfect, it went smoothly, and the audience cheered. Vivian recorded it, so we can review it in our next vocal lesson and identify areas for improvement.
2024년 11월 30일
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It was a beautiful day. Mom helped me get ready, picking out my outfit and doing my hair and makeup. I even used a bit of her high-end cosmetics. The stage was set up in the center of a park, and it was by far the grandest performance I had ever been a part of. My song was scheduled for the end, and watching everyone else perform so well boosted my confidence. While I don't think my performance was perfect, it went smoothly, and the audience cheered. Vivian recorded it, so we can review it in my next vocal lesson and identify areas for improvement.
Your text is well-written and conveys the story effectively. However, I made some slight adjustments for clarity and flow
2024년 11월 30일
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It was a beautiful day. Mom helped me get ready, choosing my outfit and doing my hair and makeup. I even used a bit of her high-end cosmetics. The stage was big, set up in the center of a park. This was definitely the grandest performance I've been a part of. My song was scheduled at the end, and watching everyone else do well boosted my confidence. While I don't think it was perfect, it went smoothly, and the audience cheered. Vivian recorded it, so we can review it in our next vocal lesson and identify areas for improvement.
Well done!
2024년 11월 30일
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