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It is my IELTS Writing task 1 :"The pie charts illustrate greenhouse gas emissions across the globe in 2002 and the projection for 2030. The bar graph shows worldwide carbon dioxide emissions by five sectors Overall, the amount of greenhouse gas emission produced by developing countries was the lowest and it is expected to remain this way in 2030. Additionally, it is forecast that every sector releases more carbon dioxide in 2030. Looking at the figures in more detail, regarding two pie charts , in 2002,OECD countries accounted for nearly half of the total amount of greenhouse gas emissions generated, at 52%. The second highest contribution came from developing countries, comprising approximately 40%, followed by countries with transition economies, at 10%. In 2030, interestingly, the share of developing countries is anticipated to increase to 48%, overtaking that of OECD countries with 43 %. Countries with transition economies are estimated to take up the remaining 9%, 1% less than in 2002. Turning to the bar graph, Industry was the major producer of carbon dioxide, accounting for roughly 6 billion tons , and is expected to maintain its position by reaching about 11 billion. Next comes to the consumer sector, this sector released around 4 billion in 2002, which was nearly half of its projected figure in 2030, at just over 8 billion. It is forecast that transportation, the third largest producer, experiences a significant growth to 6 billion, triple the amount in 2002. Finally,each waste combustion and other sector produced approximately 1 billion, and this number will change insignificantly." Hope to receive your feedback.
31 июля 2023 г., 14:45
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It is my IELTS Writing task 1 :"The pie charts illustrate greenhouse gas emissions across the globe in 2002 and a projection for 2030. The bar chart shows worldwide carbon dioxide emissions in five different sectors. Overall, the amount of greenhouse gas emission produced by developing countries was the lowest and it is expected to remain this way in 2030. (This is simply not true. The lowest figure is for “transition countries” whatever they are) Additionally, it is forecast that every sector will release more carbon dioxide in 2030. Looking at the figures in more detail, regarding the two pie charts, in 2002, OECD countries accounted for just over (nearly means below) half of the total amount of greenhouse gas emissions generated, at 52%. The second highest contribution came from developing countries, comprising approximately 40%, followed by countries with transition economies, at 10%. In 2030, interestingly (you are not giving an opinion) the share from developing countries is anticipated to increase to 48%, overtaking that of OECD countries at 43 %. Countries with transition economies are estimated to take up the remaining 9%, 1% less than in 2002. Turning to the bar chart, industry was the major producer of carbon dioxide in 2002, accounting for roughly 6 billion tons, and is expected to maintain its position by reaching about 11 billion. Next comes the consumer sector, this sector released around 4 billion tons in 2002, which was nearly half of its projected figure in 2030, at just over 8 billion. It is forecast that transportation, the third largest producer, will experience a significant growth to 6 billion, triple the amount in 2002. Finally, both of waste combustion and the other sector produced approximately 1 billion, and this number is forecast to change insignificantly." Hope to receive your feedback.
This is another non IELTS question. Be careful, you simply can’t make wrong statements. The good thing about this essay is that you generally dealt well with the contrast between the past and future. Don’t let yourself down.
31 июля 2023 г.
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