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Essay, The easy access to a huge amount of information that the internet provides creates problems. People nowadays are living in a world with full of information by getting information through the internet easily. By using the internet, there has been a controversial that accessing to a huge amount of information that the internet provides may creates problems. And I am strongly agree with this state arguing that there can be wrong knowledge that can mislead people and inappropriate knowledge can be harmful by giving them negative effects. To begin with, not only that there is right information, but also is the wrong information in the internet. These days, as the technology has been developed and upgraded, people can access to the internet readily by just typing some words. However, the thing is getting wrong information might lead people to the wrong direction. For example, my friend was searching the internet to find some information about his school project and the information he got from the internet wasn't the right answer that he was looking for. As a result, he couldn't get the score he wanted. This seems just small private problem, but I'm just saying that there are wrong information that can confuse people and create bigger problems than the problem my friend had. Moreover, inadequate information might create problems. People get easily exposed to the internet no matter their age or sex. You may think it's nothing, but think about what if children get some bad information through the internet and the bad information influence the children badly? In a recent survey by Korea Times, the number of crimes are increasing as people are getting improper information in the internet. For instance, some people are making drugs through the information they get from the internet. Not only that, kid can access to violent media from the internet. In this respect, it is obvious that some part of knowledge create bad effects. To sum up, getting information from the internet has been making the humans' life easier and more convenient than in the past. However, there are also many wrong and bad information that can create problems.

17 авг. 2014 г., 12:12

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Essay, The easy access to a huge amount of information that the internet provides may creates problems.

People nowadays are living in a world with which is full of informations by getting informations through the internet easily. By using the internet, there has been a controversial that accessing to a huge amount of informations that the internet provides may creates [cause] problems. And I am strongly agree with this statement arguing that there can be wrong knowledge that can mislead people, and inappropriate knowledge can be harmful by giving them negative effects.

To begin with, not only that there is is there right information, but also is the wrong information in the internet. These days, as the technology has been developed and upgraded increased, people can access to the internet readily by just typing [some] a few words. However, the dangerous thing is that getting wrong informations might lead people to the wrong direction. For example, my friend was searching on the internet to find some information about his school project and the information he got from the internet wasn't the right answer that he was looking for. As a result, he couldn't get the score he wanted. This seems just a small private problem, but I'm just saying that there are wrong informations that can confuse people and create bigger problems than the problem my friend had.

Moreover, an inadequate information might create problems. People get easily exposed to the internet no matter what their age or sex is. You may think it's nothing, but think about what if the case when children get some bad information through the internet, and the bad information's influence on the children badly? In a recent survey done by Korea Times, the number of crimes are increasing as people are getting improper information in the internet. For instance, some people are making drugs through the information they get from the internet. Not only that but also, kids can access to violent media from the internet. In this respect perspective, it is obvious that some a part of knowledge does actually create bad effects.

To sum up: Getting information from the internet has been making has made the humans' life lives (plural of "life") easier and more convenient than in the past. However, there are also many wrong and bad informations that can create problems.

Hi Yonguk!

You have a quite good English vocab, knowing lots of synonyms will help you a lot, but, I advice you to study more about the perfect tenses, and recognize the difference between the present pefect and the present perfect continues...

Good luck ^_^

17 августа 2014 г.

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