wendy
As an adult, I always admire my children who can happily run around the house without any annoying things. All of their world are full of joys and great care from parents. I try my best to improve their life condition. Meanwhile, I always suffer from insomnia caused by the annoying things from family and work. Even if I feel tried in the morning, but I have to get up and do everything on my daily schedule. Day by day, I slowly get old, my children grow up. Maybe one day, my children will feel annoyed due to many things, such as relationship with friends, academic achievement or even love. They need to be respected by others. I will slowly quit their lives. I will not busy taking care of them. They can do everything themslves. If I am old enough to be retired, they will take care of me. My world will be full of free time and other interesting things. This is a nature rule. We start from a happy childhood, and end with a happy time like a chid. Between of them, we experience the real life which is full of happiness and hardships.
13 ก.พ. 2025 เวลา 3:47
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As an adult, I always admire my children who can happily run around the house in such a carefree maner. All of their world is so full of joy and great love from their parents. I try my best to improve their lives. Meanwhile, I constantly suffer insomnia caused by the annoyances and worries of family and work. Even if I feel tired in the morning, I have to get up and do my daily tasks. Day by day, as I slowly get old, my children grow up. Maybe one day, my children will feel upset by many worries, such as their relationships with their friends, their academic achievement, or even love. They need to be respected by others. I will slowly allow them their independence. I won't be busy taking care of them. They will be able to do everything themselves. When I am old enough to be retired, they will take care of me. My world will be full of free time and other interesting things. This is a law of nature. We start with a happy childhood, and end with a happy time like a chid. Between these periods, we experience real life which is full of both happiness and hardships.
13 ก.พ. 2025 เวลา 9:26
As an adult, I always admire my children who can happily run around the house without a care in the world. Their entire world is full of joy because of the great love their parents have for them . I try my best to improve their life. Meanwhile, I always suffer from insomnia caused by stressful things from family and work. Even if I feel tired in the morning, I have to get up and do everything on my daily schedule. Day by day, I slowly get older but my children continue to grow. Maybe one day, my children will feel stressed due to many things, such as relationships with friends, academic pressure , or even love. They need to be respected by others. I will gradually back away from their lives. I will not be busy taking care of them. They will do everything themslves. If I am old enough to retire, they will take care of me. My world will be full of free time and other interesting things. This is natural. We start with a happy childhood, and end up happy like a chid when we’re old. Between these times, we experience real life - which is full of happiness and hardships.
Good job Wendy. I made some revisions. I replaced the word “annoyed” with “stressed.” I felt that this word was more appropriate for the context of your writing.
13 ก.พ. 2025 เวลา 5:13
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