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Hi there!! hope you're all doing great. Would you mind telling me if this short text had so many grammatical mistakes?? Enjoy the reading! THanks a lot ;-) In this day and age Technology is fairly present in all aspects of our daily lives; we all could not really do without it at all at this stage. However, it also true that there is an increasing widespread concern about the use that young people, especially children, make of electronic devices, such as smartphones and tablets. Personally speaking, parents should not allow their children to have access to them at a very tender age due to an unlimited usage of those devices could cause a negative impact on their mental health. Firstly, what kids truly need is to have significant real experiences by manipulating objects and by interacting/engaging with their peers in their immediate environment. It is scientifically proven that a long-term exposure to digital screens and social media completely unsupervised would jeopardize their innate creativity and lead them to believe that the today’s digital world is in fact the real world. Additionally, fewer and fewer adolescents are capable of maintaining visual contact with the others and, what is even worse, of taking an interest in current appeling topics since they would rather spend most of their time glued to those devices. Futhermore,the most serious/biggest concern is that they are increasingly showing learning difficulties and completely unacceptable behaviours which impact unfavourably on their personality development. Taking all of this into consideration, parents should make severe rules about how much time their children devote themselves to that ever-changing virtual world and raise them awareness of spending some quality time closer to the natural world.
1 เม.ย. 2025 เวลา 12:31
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Hi there!! hope you're all doing great. Would you mind telling me if this short text has any grammatical mistakes?? Enjoy the reading! Thanks a lot ;-) In this day and age, technology is present in all aspects of our daily lives; none of us could really do without it at this stage. However, it is also true that there is an increasingly widespread concern about the use that young people, especially children, make of electronic devices, such as smartphones and tablets. Personally speaking, I believe parents should not allow their children to have access to these devices at a very tender age due to unlimited use of those devices having a negative impact on their mental health. Firstly, what kids truly need is to have significant real-life experiences, manipulating objects and interacting/engaging with their peers in their immediate environment. It is scientifically proven that long-term unsupervised exposure to digital screens and social media jeopardizes their innate creativity and can lead them to believe that today’s digital world is in fact the real world. Additionally, fewer and fewer adolescents are capable of maintaining eye contact with others and, what is even worse, of taking an interest in what should be appealing topics, as they would rather spend most of their time glued to their devices. Furthermore, the most serious/biggest concern is that they are increasingly displaying learning difficulties and completely unacceptable behaviours which impact unfavourably on their personality development. Taking all of this into consideration, I conclude that parents should impose strict rules about how much time their children devote to that ever-changing virtual world and instead teach them awareness of the importance of spending quality time closer to the natural world.
1 เม.ย. 2025 เวลา 18:10
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