1. “Mom’s been” → “Mom has been”
• Both are correct, but “has been” is clearer in writing.
2. “I wasn’t so sure at first, but yeah.” → “I wasn’t so sure at first, but now I think it might be a good idea.”
• “Yeah” feels a bit abrupt. Expanding it makes the thought clearer.
3. “We will pass mountain hiking or such.” → “So we’ll skip mountain hiking and similar activities.”
• “Pass” isn’t the best verb here. “Skip” is more natural.
4. “Places she likes cool city sites, different interesting resorts, or something like that.” → “Places she likes—cool city spots, interesting resorts, or something along those lines.”
• Added a dash for better readability.
• “Cool city sites” → “cool city spots” (more natural).
• “Different interesting resorts” → “interesting resorts” (redundant to say “different”).
5. “And most importantly, we need to have a private toilet with us. MeeMaw needs it.” → “Most importantly, we need a private toilet with us—MeeMaw needs it.”
• Combined the sentences for better flow.
6. “Maybe Mom is right. We do need a caravan.”
• Emphasized “do” to add a conversational, reflective tone.
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