Richard
ESSAY "School should teach more subjects to help students mental health" In my opinion, school should not have more than six subjects. What's more, these should integrate the competences and the skills of the the rest. In this way, students would study less hours and learn without too much pressure. Firstly, teenagers can be stressful when it's time of evaluation. As a result, they can suffer anxiety in order to get great scores, so it could produce overeating, lack of sleep and under-self esteem. Although, more hours of physical education or dance may improve their social skills and mental health Secondly, this way encourages teachers of doing their best. Furthermore, they could express less stress, avoid shouting or doing extra work. Consequently, students and teacher may reduce their tasks and maximize their time in learning each other. In conclusión, I think that education should prioritize quality instead of quantity, that means learning should not be an obligation, but it would be funny and comfortable, then these children and teenagers could find the sense of "going to school".
7 Nis 2024 02:22
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ESSAY "School should teach more subjects to help students' mental health" In my opinion, school should not have more than six subjects. What's more, each of these should integrate the competencies and the skills of the the others. In this way, students would study fewer hours and learn without too much pressure. Firstly, teenagers can become stressed when it's time for exams. As a result, they can suffer anxiety over scores, which could produce overeating, lack of sleep and low self esteem. More time spent on physical education or dance may improve their social skills and mental health. Secondly, this approach encourages teachers to do their best. They could express less stress, and avoid shouting or doing extra work. Consequently, students and teachers may reduce their tasks and maximize their time in learning from each other. In conclusion, I think that education should prioritize quality instead of quantity. Learning should not be an obligation, but it would be fun and comfortable, then these children and teenagers could find the sense of "going to school".
STUDENTS' is a possessive, so it needs an apostrophe. HOURS is countable, so FEWER (Less time; fewer hours). STRESSFUL describes the situation creating stress. Starting a sentence with ALTHOUGH can result in a clause/incomplete sentence if not handled correctly. Be careful not to confuse FUN (enjoyable) and FUNNY (humorous). Good job overall.
7 Nisan 2024
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