Momoko Kimura (木村桃子)
For my blog She, one of my best friends from high school, was walking gently with arms linked with her father. That was our first contact after long time. She looked absolutely gorgeous in a white beautiful dress and her small face was hidden in a shining bridal veil. The times have gone by so fast. I have finally noticed that we have already been grown-up since we were still 16 years-old naughty girls.  I came back to Japan again. I would no longer be surprised how many people there are or how convenient the stores are. The weather was, however, extremely hot when I arrived, it was around 30 degrees and so humid that I had to take off my scarf and sweater. I totally looked like an outlander.  While staying at home with my family or meeting my friends from school, I always feel like I am a kid, but on the other hand I feel really old enough. The kid acts like a baby in front of her family but she also has concern for her aged parents. This kind of strange sensation makes me a little confused. I believe people in their late twenty have such a mixed feeling in the same way as I do. We have to be responsible for every single thing, but we want to be a kid forever.  I'll visit Kyoto to see my grandma, because she is sick. I was relieved to hear that she isn't in such worse condition than I expected. Trip to Japan costs me a lot and it is not so easy to see my family very often. One of the biggest issues faced by people living abroad is about their family, for sure.  Except visiting my grandma, the another purpose in coming here is to take the exam for Japanese teacher. Honestly, I don't really want to proclaim this matter even on my blog, because it would put unnecessary pressure on me, but if I want to aim to become sincere person when I keep bloging, there is no help for it. I hope it will be alright.  I would like to describe people or what it's like in this country during my stay. Japan always fascinates and sometimes astonishes people, even if they were born in there and had been living more than 20 years. Everything changes so quick, but people still keep an old, odd and eccentric Japanese custom, which is very interesting. I never have enough of that.
8 Thg 10 2018 06:56
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Hey, most of it was grammatically correct, so just take it as alternative sentences. :) 

For my blog

She, one of my best friends from high school, was walking with her father, their arms gently linked. (She wasn't walking gently, right?)  
That was our first meeting in a long time. (contact sounds really prosaic considering the rest of your text)
She looked absolutely gorgeous in a white beautiful dress, her small face (was) hidden in a shining bridal veil.
Time's  gone by so fast.
I finally noticed that the naughty 16-year old girls we used to be were now grown ups.  

I returned to Japan again. The sheer amount of people everywhere no longer surprised me, neither did how convenient the stores were. The weather was, however, extremely hot when I arrived. Around 30 degrees and so humid that I had to take off both my scarf and sweater. I looked like a complete outsider. (Here at home we've never really heard outlander)


When staying at home with my family or meeting my friends from school, I always feel like a kid, but at the same time really old. The kid acts like a baby in front of her family, but she's also concerned about her aging parents. This kind of strange sensation confuses me a bit. I believe other people in their late twenties have similarly mixed feelings. On one hand we need to be responsible, on the other we want to remain kids forever. 


I'll be visiting Kyoto to see my sick grandma. I was relieved to hear that her condition was better than I expected. (The tense is off here, you might want to change it a bit.)

Since trips to Japan cost a lot, I don't get to meet my family very often. One of the biggest issues faced by people living abroad is being away from their family. 

Besides visiting my grandma, the other reason I came here is to take my teacher exam in Japanese. Honestly, I don't really want to announce this on my blog, putting unnecessary pressure on myself, but if I am to become a sincere person when I'm blogging, there is no other way.  I hope it will be alright. 


While I'm here, I'd like to describe the people and what the country's like. Japan always fascinates and sometimes astonishes people, even if they were born here and lived here for  more than 20 years. Everything changes so quickly, yet people still keep their old, odd and eccentric Japanese customs, which is very interesting. I can never get enough of that.

8 tháng 10 năm 2018

For my blog

She, one of my best friends from high school, was walking gently with arms linked with her father. That was our first contact after a long time. She looked gorgeous in a beautiful white dress, and her small face hidden in a shining bridal veil. The times have gone by so fast. I have finally noticed that we have already been grown-ups since we were still 16 year-olds. 

I returned to Japan again. I no longer am surprised at crows and the convenience of having a variety of stores. The weather was scorching when I arrived.  It was around 30 degrees, and the humidity had forced me to remove my scarf and sweater. I looked entirely like an outlander. 

When I am with my family or socialising with my school friends, I always feel like a kid, but at the same time, I feel like a grown up. The child acts like a baby in front of her family, but she is also concerned for her aged parents. This kind of strange feeling has had me confused. I believe people in their late twenties would have such conflicted feelings the same way as I do. We have to take on responsibilities in life, but at the same time, we want to be a kid forever. 

I will be visiting Kyoto to see my ill grandma . I was relieved to hear that her condition is not what I had feared. The trip to Japan cost me a lot, and it is not so easy to see my family very often. One of the most significant issues faced by people living abroad is being away from their family for long periods of time.

Except for visiting my grandma, the other purpose of my visit to Kyoto is to sit for the Japanese teacher's qualification exam. Honestly, I do not want to mention it on my blog, because it would just put unnecessary pressure on me, but if I want to maintain my integrity as a sincere blogger, this will be the right way, and I hope it will be alright. 

Japan has always fascinated and sometimes astonished people, even if they were born and bred here for more than 20 years. Everything changes so quickly, in pursuit to keep up with the trend of urbanization and modernity but there will always be a sense of nostalgia, loyalty and tradition that the Japanese people will always adhere and preserve which is very interesting. 

Note : Hello Momoko, I've changed some of the wording and sentence structure to try and reflect your expression of your post while maintaining as close as possible to your original context. Hope this helps :) 
8 tháng 10 năm 2018
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