adan
I want to talk about making friends online. We all know that the technology advanced and gets more modern from a day to day, so it’s such a normal to see people talk with foreign people online. In my opinion making friends online isn’t always bad we just need to know how to act if something bad happens and how to not risk your self. We mustn’t forget that it depends on your age, if you’re older that 16 years old I think you could make friends online on a safe way. But don’t forget to be so careful and to not giving anyone too much information about you.
26 giu 2021 07:26
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I want to talk about making friends online. We all know that technology gets more advanced and modern from day to day (1), so it’s such a normal thing (2) to see people talk with foreign people online. In my opinion making friends online isn’t always bad, we just need to know how to act if something bad happens and how to avoid putting yourself at risk (3). We mustn’t forget that it depends on your age: if you’re over 16 years old I think you could make friends online in a safe way (4). But don’t forget to be so careful and to avoid (5) giving anyone too much information about yourself.
(1) or e.g.: “from one one day to the next”, “every day”, or “all the time”. (2) or “so it’s normal to see…” (3) “avoid” is clearer here. “How not to put yourself at risk” suggests there is a better way of putting yourself at risk. Maybe it’s clearer with another example: “She told me how not to talk to her friend” doesn’t mean she told me how to avoid speaking to her friend, but instead that she told me what things I should avoid saying to her friend (which suggests there are other things I CAN say to her friend). I.e. she told me a better way of doing something rather than how to avoid doing something. (4) or “… make friends online safely.” (5) I think it should be “not to give”, but it sounds odd. “To not give” also sounds odd. You probably have a negative too soon after “don’t”. I think it would be more common to say “to avoid” here, which avoids the double negative 🙂.
26 giugno 2021
INVITATO
I want to talk about making friends online. We all know that the technology is advanced and gets more modern from day to day. It’s quite normal to see people talk with foreign people online. In my opinion making friends online isn’t always bad; we just need to know how to act if something bad happens and not put ourselves at risk . We mustn’t forget that it depends on your age. If you’re older than 16 years old, I think you could make friends online in a safe way. However, remember to be very careful and not give anyone too much information about yourself. Hi Adan, how are you? You bring up some good points, you can definitely make some good friends online, but you have to be careful in doing so! Best wishes, Andrew
26 giugno 2021
INVITATO
I want to talk about making friends online. We all know that the technology is advanced and gets more modern from a day to day, so it’s normal to see people talk with foreign people online. In my opinion making friends online isn’t always bad, we just need to know how to act if something bad happens and how to protect yourself. We mustn’t forget that it depends on your age. If you’re older that 16 years old, I think you could make friends online in a safe way. But don’t forget to be very careful and not to give anyone too much information about yourself.
Good writing! I made a few corrections to make it sound more natural.
26 giugno 2021
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