wendy
Today, shopping online has been very common around the world. People in different ages like to stay at home and browse a variety of items on their phone or pad including clothes, electronic devices, cosmetics etc... then choose their favorite ones and pay for them, about one to four days later, the items you bought will be shipped your home. It sounds really convenient. But , sometimes the items you bought won't fit you well, especially clothes. In that case, you need to ship them back to seller. It will create an extra fee. Shopping online also brings some other worse consequence. For example, the streets become lonesome which caused by the stores' failure in the competition with online shopping. More and more clerks lost their job. People also reduce their outside time with friends or family. which can make their life boring and unvital.
1 set 2023 07:11
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Today, shopping online has is very common around the world. People of different ages like to stay at home and browse through a variety of items on their phone or tablet including clothes, electronic devices, cosmetics etc... then choose their favorite ones and order them. One to four days later, the items bought will be shipped to their homes. It sounds really convenient. But, sometimes the items bought don't well, especially clothes. In that case, they need to be shipped back to the seller. This will create extra charges. Shopping online also has other negative consequences. For example, the streets become empty because stores cannot compete with online shopping. More and more clerks will lose their job. People also reduce their social time with friends or family. which can make their lives boring and lonely.
This is very well done. I just changed a few things to make it sound a bit more idiomatic. Using the second person singular ("you") is OK, but the whole paragraph should be done in that way to be consistent. I hope that is helpful.
1 settembre 2023
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