Describe an important traditional event (in your culture)

I'm going to take the IELTS this week. This is one of the IELTS spoken English questions. I just wrote down my answer. I want to speak more native. I welcome any correction. Thanks.


I'd like to talk about a traditional festival in China. It's called the Mid-Autumn Festival which has a long history and is known as one of the most time-honored traditions. It's also called the Moon Festival, because on that day, the full moon looks pretty gorgeous and shiny. This festival is held on the 15th day of the eighth month in the lunar calendar.
Folks will gather to have a party, watch the moon, and do all kinds of festivities. One thing is associated with the moon festival is the mooncake. It's round and looks exactly like the full moon. Folks love to eat it. All sorts of pastries and fillings imaginable are available. Red beans, flowers, eggs, you name it. As I know, Starbucks and Haagen-Dazs sell mooncakes as well. These mooncakes are made from ice-cream or coffee which are very funky, also very pricy.
Well, personally, I don't want to eat a whole mooncake now because of its high calories, but I will take a bite at least because it's really tasty.
The Moon Festival is significant in my country, I say that because it's a day for family getting together, sons and daughters come back to their parents' house. Sometimes, people who have settled overseas will return to visit their parents and have the best wishes for each other. For farmers, it's their harvest day to celebrate.
The Moon Festival is such an important day which no one would like to miss it.

Describe an important traditional event (in your culture)

I'm going to take the IELTS this week. This is one of the IELTS spoken english questions. I just write down my answer. I want to speak more native. welcome any correction. Thanks.


I'd like to talk about a traditional festival in China. It's called the Mid-Autumn Festival which has a long history and is known as one of the most time-honored traditions. It's also called the Moon Festival, because on that day, the full moon looks pretty forgeous and shiny. This festival is held on the 15th day of the eighth month in the lunar calendar.
Folks will gather to have a party, watch the moon, and do kinds of festivities.One thing is associated with the moon festival is the mooncake. It's round, looks exactly like the full moon. Folks love to eat it. All sorts of pastries and fillings imaginable are available. Red beans, flowers, eggs, you name it. As I know, Starbucks and Haagen-Dazs sell mooncakes as well. These mooncakes are made from ice-cream or coffee which are very funky, also very pricy.
Well, personally, I don't want to eat a whole mooncake now because of its high calories. But I will take a bite at least, coz it's really tasty.
The Moon Festival is significant in my country, I say that because it's a day for family getting together, sons and daughters come back to their parents' house. Sometimes, people who have settled overseas will return to visit their parents and have the best wishes for each other. For farmers, it's their harvest day to celebrate.
The Moon Festival is such an important day which no one Chinese [only Chinese...not "no one" which includes everyone] would like to miss it.

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Describe an important traditional event (in your culture)

I'm going to take the IELTS this week. This is one of the IELTS spoken english questions. I just write down my answer. I want to speak more like a native speaker. welcome any correction. Thanks.


I'd like to talk about a traditional festival in China. It's called the Mid-Autumn Festival which has a long history and is known as one of the most time-honored traditions. It's also called the Moon Festival, because on that day, the full moon looks pretty gorgeous and shiny. This festival is held on the 15th day of the eighth month in the lunar calendar.
Folks will gather to have a party, watch the moon, and perform kinds of festivities.One thing is associated with the moon festival is the mooncake. It's round, looks exactly like the full moon. Folks love to eat it. All sorts of pastries and fillings imaginable are available. Red beans, flowers, eggs, you name it. As I know, Starbucks and Haagen-Dazs sell mooncakes as well. These mooncakes are made from ice-cream or coffee which are very funky, also very pricy.
Well, personally, I don't want to eat a whole mooncake now because of its high calories. But I will take a bite at least, coz it's really tasty.
The Moon Festival is significant in my country, I say that because it's a day for family get-togethers, when sons and daughters come back to their parents. Sometimes, people who have settled overseas will return to visit their parents and convey the best wishes to each other. For farmers, it's their harvest day to celebrate.
The Moon Festival is such an important day that no one would want to miss it.