IELTS Writing Task 1 (Academic Module) Pie Chart

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The pie charts illustrate the primary reasons of coming in and out to UK in 2007.

In general, despite of the various factors for migration to/from the UK, landing a definite job takes the biggest proportion.

Specifically, having a job accounted the largest percentage in migrating to UK, similarly in emigration with 30% and 29% respectively. A large number of people departed to UK, 22%, because they were looking for a job, though only 12% of the total population coming in for the same purpose.

Another contributing factor that influenced people to transfer to UK was formal education at just over of a quarter, however, surprisingly, a minority (4%) flee to UK for this.

In addition, both immigration and emigration shares almost the same percentage at 15% (less than a fifth) and 13% in order, to join or accompanying their family member. A total of 32% for those with "other" reasons or did not give reasons why they emigrated, this accounted for only 17% with regards to immigration.