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Composition: A description I have a water bottle that Mom bought me when I was very young. It has a special insulated body that keeps ice last for almost two days. The bottle is painted a bright pink, which is my favorite color, and it says “Aloha coffee stand”. Aloha means hello in Hawaii. The lid has a detachable cap that pops open with a click. There are also two ears on the skirt that were meant for a shoulder strap, but I never used it. Now that I'm older, I don't use the bottle anymore. Instead, my dad uses it for his coffee. His coffee has stained the rim of the bottle brown, permanently. I guess it belongs to him for good. It's a nice coffee can now, Dad has put it in good use.
2024年10月8日 11:23
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Composition: A description I have a water bottle that Mom bought me when I was very young. It has a special insulated body that makes ice last for almost two days. The bottle is painted bright pink, which is my favorite color, and it says “Aloha coffee stand”. Aloha means hello in Hawaiian. The lid has a detachable cap that pops open with a click. There are also two ears on the skirt(?) that were meant for a shoulder strap, but I never use it (OR I've never used it). Now that I'm older, I don't use the bottle anymore. Instead, my dad uses it for his coffee. His coffee has permanently stained the rim of the bottle brown. I guess it belongs to him for good. It's a nice coffee can now. Dad has put it to good use.
Very good. Just a few small errors. (1) Hawaiian is the word for the language/culture/people of Hawaii. (2) I don't think skirt is the correct word here but I'm not sure what it is (3) put something to good use
2024年10月8日 13:32
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