1. “practice Buddhism in my everyday life” → “integrate its practice into my daily life” • This makes the sentence flow more naturally and avoids repetition of “Buddhism.” 2. “and I hope to prepare for death well;” → “I also hope to prepare for death well.” • The semicolon was unnecessary; a simple sentence is clearer. 3. “after experiencing my grandfather and my grandma’s death” → “After experiencing the deaths of my grandfather and grandmother” • “Deaths” (plural) is clearer than “death” (singular). • “Grandmother” is more formal than “grandma,” matching “grandfather.” 4. “I have tried to stop shopping and using disposable items” → “I have been trying to stop shopping excessively and avoid using disposable items” • “Have been trying” sounds more natural for an ongoing effort. • “Stop shopping” was unclear—“stop shopping excessively” clarifies intent. • “Avoid using” flows better than “stop using.” 5. ”(even though they are free)” → “(even when they are free)” • “Even when” is more natural in this context. 6. “I’m thinking what I will leave behind after I die.” → “I often think about what I will leave behind after I die.” • “I’m thinking” sounds like a current thought, while “I often think about” expresses a repeated concern. 7. “Living is dying, but it’s difficult to talk about death in our culture.” • This sentence was fine; I kept it as is. 8. “Even the number 4 is considered an unlucky number” → “Even the number four is considered unlucky” • Writing out “four” follows formal writing conventions. • “An unlucky number” is redundant—“considered unlucky” is enough. 9. “because it is nearly homophonous to the word ‘death’” → “because it is nearly homophonous with the word ‘death’” • “Homophonous with” is the correct phrase, not “homophonous to.”