I have written a poem in English. Any thoughts would be appreciated.

Title: Curious soul (or if you can suggest any better title)

In a home of traditions, quiet and still,
Lived a heart with a curious will.
She heard of places she’d never known,
And wished to see how others had grown.
Through stories and pictures, her mind would roam,
Exploring lives unlike her own.

She dreamed of lands she couldn’t yet see,
Hoping for journeys that one day would be.
Though plans would falter and chances fade,
Her hope stayed strong, her dreams unafraid.

Yet deep inside, a fear took hold,
Of stepping beyond the familiar mold.
But she faced her fears, her doubts set alight,
And chose to follow her dreams despite.

She travelled to places with cultures bright,
And felt the pull of possibility’s light.
She learned the world could fit together,
And hold both old and new forever.

Question

I have written a poem in English. Any thoughts would be appreciated.

Title: Curious soul (or if you can suggest any better title)

In a home of traditions, quiet and still,
Lived a heart with a curious will.
She heard of places she’d never known,
And wished to see how others had grown.
Through stories and pictures, her mind would roam,
Exploring lives unlike her own.

She dreamed of lands she couldn’t yet see,
Hoping for journeys that one day would be.
Though plans would falter and chances fade,
Her hope stayed strong, her dreams unafraid.

Yet deep inside, a fear took hold,
Of stepping beyond the familiar mold.
But she faced her fears, her doubts set alight,
And chose to follow her dreams despite.

She travelled to places with cultures bright,
And felt the pull of possibility’s light.
She learned the world could fit together,
And hold both old and new forever.

Answer

Aditi, you have improved the quality if iTalki posts by leaps and bounds. Thank you for making this site interesting and fun.  I have made numerous suggestions, but take them only that way. I do not claim my ideas to be better than yours, just alternate ways of saying things.  I find your final verse to be less good than the others.  You might work on that one.  I've introduced a lot of word inversions only because they make things sound more poetic.

To increase poetic feeling, I made the language less precise and less grammatically perfect. Also I eliminated a lot of punctuation.  Removing commas increases ambiguity, which in poetry is sometimes good.

Title: A Soul takes Flight

In a home where tradition, quiet and still
Lived a heart, longed a girl, and hope to explore
What wind told of places not known before
And wished to to be told how others had grown
While stories and sights within her did roam
Where be lives, hearts, and hopes unlike her own.

She dreamed of lands she could not yet see,
Hoping for journeys that one day might be.
Plans they do falter, and chance it does fade,
Yet stayed her hope strong, her dreams not afraid.

Yet deep inside, a fear took a hold:
"Step not outside thy familiar mold!"
But faced she her fears, her doubts set alight
And chose she to follow her dreams in spite.

Answer

This is a beautiful poem, full of vivid imagery and a strong sense of yearning and personal growth. Your use of rhyming gives it a smooth flow, and the message of overcoming fear and pursuing dreams is inspiring. I also like how you’ve woven the theme of curiosity and exploration into the structure of the poem, showing the evolution of the speaker’s journey.

Here are a few thoughts to refine it further:

Title suggestion: "Beyond the Mold" or "A Journey of the Soul." These might capture the themes of both curiosity and stepping out of one’s comfort zone.

Line suggestions:

In the line "Her hope stayed strong, her dreams unafraid," you might consider changing "unafraid" to something like "unshaken" or "unbroken" to deepen the sense of resilience.
The phrase "She learned the world could fit together" might flow more seamlessly with a small tweak like "She learned the world could unite" or "She saw how the world could fit together."