李梦桐
Family Rosary Prayer Group
Dear Phil Godbolt. Jr., Phil Godbolt, Sr., or Elizabeth Godbolt,
I saw your virtual Gatherings with Zoom and I'm interested in it. is it still open? thank you!
blessings,
X
2025年3月26日 02:53
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Subject: Family Rosary Prayer Group
Dear Phil Godbolt Jr., Phil Godbolt Sr., or Elizabeth Godbolt,
I saw your virtual gatherings on Zoom, and I’m very interested in joining. Is it still open?
Thank you!
Blessings,
[X]
1. “virtual Gatherings with Zoom” → “virtual gatherings on Zoom”
• “Gatherings” doesn’t need to be capitalized.
• “With Zoom” sounds awkward; “on Zoom” is more natural.
2. “I’m interested in it. is it still open?” → “I’m very interested in joining. Is it still open?”
• “Interested in it” is vague; “interested in joining” is clearer.
• “Is” should be capitalized as it starts a new sentence.
2025年3月27日 04:50
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